16th may 2013
Dear diary
Today is one of the hardest days of my life I have to leave my home for solford university.I am going to study physics it is going to be a hard tow weeks for me.my sisters are crying at my feet.well anyway this morning was the worst.I came doun to breakfast and got a bowl and it smashed as soon as I had dodged it a big surprise came out of my sisters mouths.anyway I cleaned up the smashed bowl.
Now got to go and pack.
by Mark
Dear diary
Today is one of the hardest days of my life I have to leave my home for solford university.I am going to study physics it is going to be a hard tow weeks for me.my sisters are crying at my feet.well anyway this morning was the worst.I came doun to breakfast and got a bowl and it smashed as soon as I had dodged it a big surprise came out of my sisters mouths.anyway I cleaned up the smashed bowl.
Now got to go and pack.
by Mark
Hi this diary entry was very good not meaning to be rude you need to improve your spellings.
ReplyDeleteby Awais K
WELL DONE!!!!! PLEASE CONTINUE BLOGGING THANKS.
It was very good and intresting but please check
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Bykianm
This is a fantastic blog and very interesting.First I was confused because you are only in year 5 and your going to university than later I found out that you were pretending to be somebody else.I am not being mean but please try to read your work before you publish it becouse some of it does not make sense.
ReplyDeletewell done!
by Haleema.R
I think that this is a good post and you put really a lot of effort in it. I don't mean to be rude or mean but ypu sept a few things wrong and you also missed a few capital letters in!
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