Wednesday 26 June 2013

Steve Jobs

  Friday 15th May 1965

 
 
I`m so glad to be with my foster parents,Paul and Clara Jobs.My dad gave me up at birth
I don`t mind.My foster parents are so nice like today when I got top marks in science
and Clara said 'Steve, thats garte.I`ll make you a nice tea.' Mmm...I think that tea is cooking. Well I am going to swim in the pool.I to invent some thing big...

by Abbie
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11 comments:

  1. Mersey Vale Year Five1 July 2013 at 06:37

    That is an awsome diary. good speechmarks.
    I don't want to be mean but try and check your poster before you send it.
    from hamzah

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  2. Mersey Vale Year Five1 July 2013 at 06:44

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  3. Mersey Vale Year Five1 July 2013 at 06:47

    Hi
    I really liked your post. I especially liked the bit that he is happy even though he is fostered. I think its really sweet. I don't mean to be rude but to improve put a space after a full stop. :)

    Aqib.H

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  4. Mersey Vale Year Five1 July 2013 at 06:52

    This is a Fabulous blog post.
    I don't mean to be rude but next time check your spelling before you post something.


    A.M

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  5. Mersey Vale Year Five1 July 2013 at 06:53

    That is a amazing blog post.
    Not to be rude punctuation and spelling could be improved.
    Keep the good science work up, well done!
    By:Iman Y

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  6. Mersey Vale Year Five2 July 2013 at 01:33

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  7. Mersey Vale Year Five2 July 2013 at 01:34

    Hello I liked you're blog post you inproviesed
    very well and you should give yourself a pat on
    your belly, but in my opinion you've spelled
    "great" wrong this is how you spelled it "garte".

    By Alex.:) :) :) :) :) :) :) :) :) :)

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  8. Mersey Vale Year Five2 July 2013 at 01:35

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  9. Mersey Vale Year Five2 July 2013 at 01:36

    Please could you do a blog on bill gates and the inventors of sony. :)
    Alex

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  10. Mersey Vale Year Five2 July 2013 at 01:42

    love your post abbie keep up the good work

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  11. Mersey Vale Year Five2 July 2013 at 01:44

    I really did not ge attractive to your blog of bieng steve gobs and i thought you are a good bu remember not to tell the whole of the steve gobs story and you are good at punctuation

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